Although I thought the very first sentence could have been catchier, it was interesting how you put those adjectives in the very beginning. It gives the readers an initial idea of just what the show is about, which is great. It seems like you took a lot from the exercise we did in class on what goes into making a good critical review. You gave some background on the cartoon, which helps the readers fully understand the show. Actually inserting the pictures was genius. Reading about it is one aspect, but giving the readers a chance to see it as they read about it, all in one shot, is even better! There are a couple of places where commas should be added. You spelled the word “from” wrong in the paragraph where you speak about BET. Also at the end of that paragraph you used the word “two” four times, within two sentences. It sounds a little redundant. It seems like you truly took your time and put a lot of effort into thinking of ways to express your opinion, and the opinions of others. The way you compared the show to a car accident was very clever because it is so true, just not really admitted. I’ve never watched the show, but after reading your review, I’m definitely going to check it out. I think maybe if you added some commentary from the director, or producer’s standpoint on the show, and what they are trying to portray that would make it a little better. I absolutely enjoyed reading your review, it is coming along great.
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Tiasia Currie for: Mike Francois
Although I thought the very first sentence could have been catchier, it was interesting how you put those adjectives in the very beginning. It gives the readers an initial idea of just what the show is about, which is great. It seems like you took a lot from the exercise we did in class on what goes into making a good critical review. You gave some background on the cartoon, which helps the readers fully understand the show. Actually inserting the pictures was genius. Reading about it is one aspect, but giving the readers a chance to see it as they read about it, all in one shot, is even better! There are a couple of places where commas should be added. You spelled the word “from” wrong in the paragraph where you speak about BET. Also at the end of that paragraph you used the word “two” four times, within two sentences. It sounds a little redundant. It seems like you truly took your time and put a lot of effort into thinking of ways to express your opinion, and the opinions of others. The way you compared the show to a car accident was very clever because it is so true, just not really admitted. I’ve never watched the show, but after reading your review, I’m definitely going to check it out. I think maybe if you added some commentary from the director, or producer’s standpoint on the show, and what they are trying to portray that would make it a little better. I absolutely enjoyed reading your review, it is coming along great.